A Morning Before Work

By lawrence • Feb 7th, 2010 • Category: Daily Shots

My first colour shots with the Pentax 67ii.

Two shots on EKtar. I provide my own self critique here if interested.

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  1. kal on February 7th, 2010 at 6:52 pm:

    Hi Lawrence, I read your critique and I truly admire your ability to dissect your own work…too few people do that. I think they are both great images, and I wonder if the only issue here is in fact the geometry. I see two distinct triangles in both compositions that create that “messy” feel you describe. They resolve around the triangle created by the bright white/yellow shaft of light coming in from the left of the image drawing you to the centre, while the diagonal of the poles in both cases does not draw you to the same point, but somewhere into the middle of the white triangle. The eye is always drawn to the lightest parts of an image and the result in moth cases, is that there is where the eye rests, somewhere in no mans land. Had the diagonal of the poles met the point of the white triangle you would have had the compositional geometry. That doesn’t take away from your choices, sometimes the shot is the best you can make of the moment and where you are standing, and the colours here are astounding on their own. At least that is how I would have seen an image like this (if I ever took a landscape LOL!!)

    Rgds, K

  2. kaden on February 7th, 2010 at 7:06 pm:

    Hi Lawrence,

    I too read your self-critique. It is a good quality to be able to provide self evaluation of an image on such a detached manner.
    Aside from the color, I too like the repetitive patterns and elements. Excellent imagery.

  3. BenMasters on February 8th, 2010 at 7:44 am:

    Good work Lawrence; I wonder if this might have worked if you had filled the frame (top to bottom) with him – of course it would have made an entirely different shot and granted given that you didnt know the person that might have been difficult.

    I have been looking at this a great deal this weekend hence my suggestion http://www.michaelkenna.com/gallery_images/16fa3141.jpg

    A slightly related note I have this book on order – I will let you know what it is like when it arrives : http://www.amazon.co.uk/Criticizing-Photographs-Introduction-Understanding-Images/dp/0072977434

  4. lawrence on February 9th, 2010 at 7:10 am:

    Thanks guys… Ben – you could be right. Prob would have had a reduced effect as far as the impact of the sunrise would have had – but better picture, v possibly.

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